Peer Review

Writer’s Name Janiece Miller
Paper Title No title
DateEditor’ Name Janiece Miller

Peer Review Worksheet

1. Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and relevant to the topic?

The first paragraph starts with a thesis explaining what the writer is writing about.
The paper does introduce the papers topic and the writers approach. The first sentence caught my attention and had me interested in the idea. The first paragraph could be edited. The sentence in the first paragraph that state "There are major differences in comparison in the way food was created in that time period and in this time period.". Could use commas and be rephrased.

2. What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.
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The way chicken and dumplings was created in the 1900's is very different from today." The introduction could use help in the grammar. The words should be restated or written in order to fit with the correct verbs.

3. Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What are the main conclusions? The paragraphs make relevant points and states the ideas.

The paper is organized and discusses each topic. The paragraphs discuss each part of the meal and ingredients. The second paragraph explains how the ancestors raised the chickens. The third paragraph continues on that topic explaining more of the differences and the process of how the chicken was killed. Th third paragraph states how the chicken is cured today. The fourth. Explains how the chicken is at the store and how less fresh it is. The fifth explains how black pepper is made. The sixth explains how salt is made. The seventh paragraph introduces the seasonings and what they include. The eighth paragraph explains what the dumplings are made out of as well as, where the ingredients came from. The tenth paragraph explains how flour was created and where water came from. The eleventh paragraph main idea focuses on the and the gravy difference from now and today. The twelve th paragraph discusses the timing contributed and the difference in utensils and dishes. The last paragraph discusses the opinion of the writer, which time period they believed was healthier.

4. Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? Identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.

The writer did not indent in order, to show where new paragraphs should begin. The tone of the essay was interesting and on topic but, there should be more information included on the gravy. The sources should have also been stated. The sentence in the introduction "There are many differences in comparison in the way.." Needs to be re worded.

5. Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and reference format used?

The writer did not properly identify the resources. The resources were not included.

6. What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.
The writer used a lot of information. The writer also discussed interesting points. Clear and understanding conclusion.